Tuesday, 10 March 2009

Two Sentence Tuesday

For a slight break from my now full reading routine, I read a cute short ebook story, "Naughty Is Nice" by Mari Carr from Samhain Publishing about a woman who accidently drops her Christmas wish list and a friendly neighbour named Nick, who wants to be more than a friend, picks it up. Two sentences I read were: "He folded the list and put it in his pocket, his mind running a hundred miles a minute. The changes Joy was thinking about making in her life were erotic as all get out."

And two sentences I wrote recently in my draft dark fantasy manuscript 'Keeper 2' were: "Wilhelm had slipped into the abandoned house by a side entrance, and, in doing so, surprised the stranger who missed a step along the ledge above the garden court and who fell, quite literally, into his hands. Her strength had belied her feminine stature."

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13 comments:

David Cranmer said...

"Her strength had belied her feminine stature" is bloody brilliant as the Brits say.

Crystal Phares said...

I love it, Barbara! I want to read more.

Gary Rith Pottery Blog said...

::::blushblushblush::::

Clare2e said...

Loving it, Barbara, and thanks for the linkage, but don't forget to swing by our comments to let us know you've posted. I may check you, but other WoM may not know to do it, and we don't want to miss your intriguing two.

Lois Karlin said...

My my! Two-sentence-tuesday participants are randy this week!

Barbara Martin said...

David, Wilhelm's not too happy she's kocked the breath out of him.

Crystal, then tune in next week.

Gary, if you blush at this mere mention, I'm worried about a possible stroke when the sizzle starts.

Barbara Martin said...

Clare, note taken.

Lois, it often takes more than a hint to get my blood pressure up.

Charles Gramlich said...

Naught is nice. Sounds like a good bumper sticker.

BernardL said...

I think your first sentence could be split into two, eliminating both an 'and' along with a few commas.

Barbara Martin said...

Bernard, it will be rewritten once the first draft is complete. Thanks for helping though.

Linda McLaughlin said...

Great choices this week, Barbara. The Christmas story sounds naughty but fun, and I like your sentences. Poor Wilhelm, hope he recovers quickly. ;)

Cloudia said...

I'm with David C.
I liked that line also, Barbara.
Aloha-

Barbara Martin said...

Linda, Wilhelm is a big, strong man. He'll be over his surprise quickly.

Clouida, thanks and I really have to rewrite the previous sentence.