As I write fantasy stories I read books in the genre that can hold my attention, and one of the best to do that is the Temeraire series by Naomi Novik. Today’s two recently read sentences are from Empire of Ivory, Book 4:
“Send up another, damn you, send them all up, at once if you have to,” Laurence said savagely to poor Calloway, who did not deserve to be sworn at: the gunner was firing off the flares so quickly his hands were scorched black, skin cracking and peeling to bright red where some powder had spilled onto his fingers; he was not stopping to wipe them clean before setting each flare to the match.
"One of the little French dragons darted in again, slashing at Temeraire’s side, and five men fell screaming as a piece of the makeshift carrying-harness unraveled."
With the above two sentences as a shining example of creative writing, I can aspire to continue working my craft to improve it to a similar level. My two sentences are from one of my draft fantasy manuscripts:
“Stepping closer to the wall, Dupuis lifted the lantern, and as the sight registered in his brain, chills ran up his back and legs. It was impossible, but there it was: a flap of navy blue trouser and the toe of a laced boot, protruding from the rock wall.”
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